Four seasons

2019-01-07 · 첨삭 강사 May

학생이 쓴 원문

Hi Teacher! Take care and I hope you get better soon~ There are lots of people like four seasons. Four seasons have their attractions.Spring is a beautiful time when the flowers bloom everywhere so it's wonderful season to spend time outside. In summer, people can go to the beach and swim. and they like to eat watermelon and ice cream. In fall, fruits are plentiful and delicious. I like eat fresh persimmons. The mountains are beautiful in the fall. Many mountains are covered with colorful autumn foliage. In Winter, Snow turn the world into white land in front of us. We can feel pure and we can see the children have a snowball fight and make snowman outside. But some people compared with each season. Besides, some people doesn't like specific season like summer, winter because, it's so hot and it's so cold. We should know and appreciate that not all countries have four seasons. we are blessed with four entirely dissimilar seasons and we can enjoy four seasons anytime~.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for sharing your thoughts [이름]! I appreciate it.

In the Philippines, there are only two seasons: wet and dry or summer and rainy.

You are really lucky that your country has four seasons.

Honestly, I\'ve never seen a snow. ^^

~~May~~

There are lots of people like four seasons.

>> Correct

Four seasons have their attractions

>> Correct

or >> Four seasons have their own attractions.

Spring is a beautiful time when the flowers bloom everywhere so it\'s wonderful season to spend time outside.

>> Spring is a beautiful time for the flowers to bloom everywhere so it\'s a wonderful season to spend time outside.

In summer, people can go to the beach and swim. and they like to eat watermelon and ice cream. 

>> Correct
In fall, fruits are plentiful and delicious.

>> Correct

Or >> In fall, there are many delicious fruits.

I like eat fresh persimmons.

>> I like eating fresh persimmons.

The mountains are beautiful in the fall.

>> The mountains are beautiful in fall season.

Many mountains are covered with colorful autumn foliage.

>> Correct

In Winter, Snow turn the world into white land in front of us.

>> In winter, the areas are surrounded by snow.

We can feel pure and we can see the children have a snowball fight and make snowman outside. 

>> We feel happy and we can see children making a snowman and playing with snowballs outside.
 But some people compared with each season.

>> But there are some people who compare the seasons.

Besides, some people doesn\'t like specific season like summer, winter because, it\'s so hot and it\'s so cold.

>> Besides, some people doesn\'t like a specific season.

We should know and appreciate that not all countries have four seasons.

>> We should know that not all countries have four seasons.
we are blessed with four entirely dissimilar seasons and we can enjoy four seasons anytime~.

>> We are blessed that we experience four different seasons and we enjoy them anytime.

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