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2022-11-29 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

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A good healthcare system is very useful to combat student\'s obesity. Every student can take comprehensive health checkup every 3 tears at the hospital. So we cancheck diseases early and priscribed accordingly. It\'s free. Of course we pay big taxes for health insurance every month.

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Hi Ms. [이름]!
Thank you for your response to your homework. a stabilized healthcare system is what every nation needs. I hope this applies to all :)
Have a good day!
Aki~

A good healthcare system is very useful to combat student\'s obesity.
>>> A good healthcare system is very useful to combat student obesity.

Every student can take comprehensive health checkup every 3 tears at the hospital.
>>> Every student can take a comprehensive health checkup every 3 tears at the hospital.

So we cancheck diseases early and priscribed accordingly.
>>> So we can check diseases early and prescribe accordingly.

It\'s free. Of course we pay big taxes for health insurance every month.
>>> It\'s free. of course, we pay significant taxes for health insurance every month.

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