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2014-08-18 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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<<ESSAY >> If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire: an inexperienced worker at a lower salary or an experienced worker at a higher salary? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. : As I know, most of employers like to hire inexperienced worker at a lower salary. Because, Most of company have ability of making get better their career, through their own business management educations. Think creatively. That is the best. << Free Composition>> 1. Contents of this text book are very old and stupid. All of articles are wrong. Because, In my eyes, these things are written by foreign reporters who are not well known about reality of Korea. So, I can't get these opinions. 2. I saw the The Philippines movie 'Assassination of Benigno Aquino' last Saturday. I 'm ordinarily into history and politic of other countries. In fact, this is very famous story in the world. It's a shame, dictatorship of President Marcos caused economic failure. By the way.. How could Imelda be a congresswomen? I was quite surprised. That was a mysterious event. However, on the other hand, I envied her beauty and authority. --:::: 3. I don't live fear of my future after retirement. Meaning of words 'fear' and 'afraid' aren't the same. They are different specifically. I'm afraid I 'm getting older and weak. 4. It's a shame I couldn't get married earlier. I always regret I got married too late. Possibly, it will be my life-long regret. 5. It would be grateful to God, if I were genius. It would be fantastic, if you went to Niagara Falls. It would be incredible, if he went to The Great Of China. It would be helpful, I could speak Chinese well. It would be unforgettable, I went to Rocky Mountain National Park of Canada. It would be excited, they could try some Korean food at Samcheong-dong.

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Good afternoon Miss. [Name]!

Thank you for sending this in.

I hope that you are having a good day.

Anyway, take care!

<<ESSAY >>
If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire: an inexperienced worker at a lower salary or an experienced worker at a higher salary? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
: As I know, most of employers like to hire inexperienced worker at a lower salary. 

>> As I know, most employers like to hire inexperienced workers at a lower salary.

>> As I know, most employers like to hire an inexperienced worker at a lower salary.
Because, Most of company have ability of making get better their career, through  their own business management educations.
>> Because most companies can provide trainings and seminars to enhance the skills of their employees.

Think creatively.

>> Correct 

>> or: Be creative.

That is the best.

>> That is the best qualification of a good employee.
<< Free Composition>>
1. Contents of this text book are very old and stupid.

>> 1. The contents of this text book are very old and stupid.
All of articles are wrong.

>> All the articles are wrong.

>> All the data from the articles are wrong.
Because, In my eyes, these things are written by foreign reporters who are not well known about reality of Korea.

>> Because I think these things were written by foreign reporters who are not familiar about life in Korea.

So, I can\'t get these opinions.
>> So I don\'t understand their opinions.
2. I saw the The Philippines movie \'Assassination of Benigno Aquino\' last Saturday. 

>> I saw the Filipino movie, \'Assassination of Benigno Aquino\' last Saturday.
I \'m ordinarily into history and politic of other countries.
>> I\'m interested about history and politics of other countries.

In fact, this is very famous story in the world.

>> In fact, this is a very famous story all over the world.
It\'s a shame, dictatorship of President Marcos caused economic failure.
>> It\'s a shame that the dictatorship of President Marcos caused economic failure. 

By the way.. How could Imelda be a congresswomen?

>> By the way, how did Imelda become a Congresswoman?
I was quite surprised.

>> Correct.

That was a mysterious event.

>> That was suspicious.

>> That was a surprising event.

However, on the other hand, I envied her beauty and authority. --::::

>> Correct.
3. I don\'t live fear of my future after retirement. 

>> I am not afraid of my future after retirement.

Meaning of words \'fear\' and \'afraid\' aren\'t the same.

>> The meaning of fear is different from afraid.
They are different specifically.

>> Correct.
I\'m afraid I \'m getting older and weak.
>> I\'m afraid I\'m getting older and weaker.
4. It\'s a shame I couldn\'t get married earlier. 

>> Correct.
I always regret I got married too late.

>> Correct.
Possibly, it will be my life-long regret.
>> Correct.
5. It would be grateful to God, if I were genius. 

>> Correct.
It would be fantastic, if you went to Niagara Falls.

>> It would be fantastic if you could go to Niagara Falls.
It would be helpful, I could speak Chinese well.

>> It would be helpful, if I could speak Chinese well.

It would be unforgettable, I went to Rocky Mountain National Park of Canada.

>> It would be unforgettable/fun if I could go to the Rocky Mountain National Park of Canada.
It would be excited, they could try some Korean food at Samcheong-dong.

>> It would be exciting if they would try some Korean foods at Samcheong-dong.

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