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2021-12-30 · 첨삭 강사 Tricia

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since you didn\'t give me a homework, I would write my plan of future. I attend in busan national maritime high school specializing in navigation. this institution fosters the voyage officers and engineers in cargo ships. so, I will work on the board as a navigational officer. but it is not my ultimate goal of life. this is my plan. first, I would work as a navigational officer in 3 years. also, korea is a country that require compulsory military service and working on board as a navigational officer or engineer give us benefit of military exemption. second, I would go university in UK by using the money I earned. lastly, I want to be a specialist of maritime field and work internationally. however, there is no specific plan so I will have revised by the time to be an adult. nevertheless, the future is so dread because it is unexpected, I will do my best!

강사 첨삭

Hello, Kevin! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia


since you didn\'t give me a homework,
>> Since you didn\'t give me homework.

I would write my plan of future. 
>> I would write my plan for the future. 

I attend in busan national maritime high school specializing in navigation.
>> I\'m attending Busan National Maritime High School specializing in navigation. 

this institution fosters the voyage officers and engineers in cargo ships.
>> This institution fosters the voyage officers and engineers in cargo ships.

so, I will work on the board as a navigational officer. but it is not my ultimate goal of life.
>> So, I will work on the board as a navigational officer but it is not my ultimate goal in life.

this is my plan.
>> These are my plan. 

first, I would work as a navigational officer in 3 years. also, korea is a country that require compulsory military service and working on board as a navigational officer or engineer give us benefit of military exemption.
>> First, I will work as a navigational officer for 3 years. Also, Korea is a country that requires compulsory military service, and working on board as a navigational officer or engineer gives us the benefit of military exemption. 

second, I would go university in UK by using the money I earned. 
>> Second, I would go to a university in the UK by using the money I earned. 

lastly, I want to be a specialist of maritime field and work internationally.
>> Lastly, I want to be a specialist in the maritime field and work internationally.

however, there is no specific plan so I will have revised by the time to be an adult.
>> However, there is no specific plan so I will have revised by the time to be an adult.

nevertheless, the future is so dread because it is unexpected, I will do my best!
>> Nevertheless, the future is so dreading because it is unexpected but I will do my best!

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