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Topic: How does academy proceed to right direction? I worked in an English academy for one month. However, I think the academy doesn't persue efficiency. Why doesn't the academy to play a role to improve the students's academical skills persue it? I think the reason is excess promotion of academy. Most school parents hope for our students to study as much as they can. Therefore, to maximize its profit, the academy forces the students to study as much as they can. However, this is bad for the student's grade. Excess assignments and studying quantity give the students enormous stress. Rather, their grades may lower. So, I think academy need to focus on the student rather than the school parents. If the academy focuses on the student, the student would rise up his or her grade efficiently. That is also good for his or her parents.

Hello [이름]! This is an excellent topic. I totally agree with what you wrote here. I don\'t understand why some parents would force their kids to study too much to the point that they get sick and tired of it. Studying is supposed to be a fun and exciting learning experience. Thanks for sharing! Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ I worked in an English academy for one month. >> CORRECT! However, I think the academy doesn\'t persue efficiency. >> However, I think the academy doesn\'t pursue efficiency. Why doesn\'t the academy to play a role to improve the students\'s academical skills persue it? >> Why can\'t the academy play a role in improving the student\'s academic skills? I think the reason is excess promotion of academy. >> I think the reason is the excess promotion of the academy. Most school parents hope for our students to study as much as they can. >> Most parents hope their kids would study hard. Therefore, to maximize its profit, the academy forces the students to study as much as they can. >> CORRECT! However, this is bad for the student\'s grade. >> CORRECT! Excess assignments and studying quantity give the students enormous stress. >> Too much assignment and overstudying can give the students lots of stress.   Rather, their grades may lower. >> Therefore, their grades might get lower. OR >> Therefore, their grades might suffer. So, I think academy need to focus on the student rather than the school parents. >> So I think the academy needs to focus on the students rather than the parents. If the academy focuses on the student, the student would rise up his or her grade efficiently. >> If the academy focuses on the student, he/she would increase his/her grades efficiently. That is also good for his or her parents. >> That is also a good outcome for his/her parents.