Freedom fighters
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I think Kim-Goo is a great freedom fighter because he worked hard to make Korea an independent country and he also worked hard for freedom after the invasion of Japan.
Next he worked hard for freedom. He killed a Japanese General because Japanese killed Empress Myeong-seong. Also, he had many freedom speeches. We can know that he is a great lover of Korea. In addition, other patriots too!
Lastly, he also worked hard for freedom after the invasion of Japan. At 1945, Korea was independent from Japan; however Korea had a fight because of their ideological dispute, Democracy and Communism. Kim-Goo tried to make our country one by having many speeches.
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Hello Joey,
It's always good to learn about the people from the past, especially those who struggled for the well-being of people today. Have a good rest and talk to you tomorrow.
-RJ
I think Kim-Goo is a great freedom fighter because he worked hard to make Korea an independent country and he also worked hard for freedom after the invasion of Japan.>>correct
Next he worked hard for freedom. He killed a Japanese General because Japanese killed Empress Myeong-seong.
>>Aside from working hard for freedom, he also killed a Japanese General because the Japanese killed Empress Myeong-seong.
Also, he had many freedom speeches. We can know that he is a great lover of Korea. In addition, other patriots too!
>>correct
Lastly, he also worked hard for freedom after the invasion of Japan.
Lastly, he also worked hard for freedom after the invasion of Japan.
>>Lastly, he worked hard for freedom after the invasion of Japan.
At 1945, Korea was independent from Japan; however Korea had a fight because of their ideological dispute, Democracy and Communism.
>>At 1945, Korea gained it's independent from Japan; however Korea was divided because of their ideological dispute, Democracy and Communism.
Kim-Goo tried to make our country one by having many speeches.
>>correct
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