Friday Homework

2021-07-13 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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HOMEWORK: What functions in your new phone do you enjoy using? I enjoy every single function on my new phone. I\'m really enjoying them. First, camera. I Phones are popular for the image quality of the camera. I took a picture of my cat with my new phone and it was fantastic. More clear than seeing through our both eyes. I knew that i phones camera is good but after I experience it with both eyes, I could feel it actually. Second, a clipped word. When we buy an i phone there is a function named a clipped word. We can decorate our widgets and put our pictures into widgets. Actually, the process is quite complicated but it doesn\'t matter. I decorated my hone including widgets with Ravenclaw, the dormitory from Hogwarts, Harry Potter. There are a lot of benefits to i phones but sometimes i phones are difficult to compare to Samsung. Thus we have a lot of good points in i phones but there are also a lot of bad points in i phones.

강사 첨삭

Hello Claire!
Thanks for doing so many compositions today. Your effort was incredible. See you tomorrow! ^^
~~Teacher Kate

I enjoy every single function on my new phone.
>>CORRECT!
I\'m really enjoying them.
>>CORRECT!
First, camera.
>>The first one is the camera. 
I Phones are popular for the image quality of the camera.
>>CORRECT!
I took a picture of my cat with my new phone and it was fantastic.
>>CORRECT!
More clear than seeing through our both eyes.
>>It was clearer than seeing through both of our eyes. 
I knew that iPhone camera is good but after I experience it with both eyes, I could feel it actually.
>>I knew that iPhone camera is good but after I experience it with my own eyes, I could actually feel it.
Second, a clipped word.
>>Second is the clipped word. 
When we buy an iphone there is a function named a clipped word.
>>CORRECT!
We can decorate our widgets and put our pictures into widgets.
>>We can decorate our widgets and put our pictures into the widgets.
Actually, the process is quite complicated but it doesn\'t matter.
>>CORRECT!
I decorated my hone including widgets with Ravenclaw, the dormitory from Hogwarts, Harry Potter.
>>I decorated my phone by including widgets with pictures of Ravenclaw, the dormitory from Hogwarts, and Harry Potter.
There are a lot of benefits to iphones but sometimes iphones are difficult to compare to Samsung.
>>There are a lot of benefits of iPhones but sometimes iPhones are difficult to use compared to Samsung.
Thus we have a lot of good points in i phones but there are also a lot of bad points in i phones.
>>Thus iPhones have a lot of good points but they also have a lot of bad points.

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