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2011-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 Dominic

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I have a friend who got married and had a baby. But she could not have a wedding ceremony. she just resistered marriage record in the public office. Because she was pregnant without any plan about the marriage. At that time, she and her boyfriend decided to bear a baby. So they started to prepare their wedding. However many troubles happened. They didn't have enough money and their parents didn't help them at all. The man's mother allowed them to get married but she didn't hurry to help them. So she couldn't live with her husband until the baby came. The worse situation is her mother didn't keep her promise. she told my friend to give some money for buying essential stuffs for living. But she changed her mind and she didn't give a hand to my friend.

강사 첨삭

  Hi Ms. [Name], Thanks for sending this in. I appreciate it. I'm sorry to hear about your friend's situation. Just as they say at the end of the day you couldn't rely on anyone else but yourself. How's your friend holding up? I hope she is well! J -T.Dominic-   I have a friend who got married and had a baby. >>CORRECTBut she could not have a wedding ceremony. >>CORRECT she just resistered marriage record in the public office. >>She just registered her marriage record [certificate] in the public office, because she was just pregnant without any plans of getting married.Because she was pregnant without any plan about the marriage.At that time, she and her boyfriend decided to bear a baby. >>At that time she and her boyfriend decided to have a baby. [only the woman bears the baby J] So they started to prepare their wedding. >>CORRECT However many troubles happened. >>CORRECT They didn't have enough money and their parents didn't help them at all. >>CORRECTThe man's mother allowed them to get married but she didn't hurry to help them. >>The man's mother allowed them to get married but she wasn't eager to help them. So she couldn't live with her husband until the baby came.>>CORRECTThe worse situation is her mother didn't keep her promise. >>The worst part about it is that her mother didn't keep her promise. she told my friend to give some money for buying essential stuffs for living. >>She told my friend that she will give some money to buy the essential stuff that they will need. But she changed her mind and she didn't give a hand to my friend. >>But she changed her mind and she didn't give her a hand.      

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