friend

2021-03-18 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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As i get older, I recognize who is the \'REAL\' friend for me. When i make friend, I don\'t see any qualities about them. Now that I think about it, however, I choose some of them as my \'REAL\' friend, even I don\'t know. Judging from my \'REAL\' friend, what I want my friends to be have is the passion about their job or career, and not having a guilty conscience. I think ones who has high self-esteem have good thinking and cool as one personality.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름] [이름],
Thank you for taking the time and effort to write your first ever composition. I had a lot of fun reading it. Keep up the good work! ^^ See you in class tomorrow!
~~Teacher Kate

As i get older, I recognize who is the \'REAL\' friend for me.
>>As I get older, I recognize what a \'REAL\' friend is for me.
When i make friend, I don\'t see any qualities about them. 
>>When I make friends, I don\'t look at their qualities. . 
Now that I think about it, however, I choose some of them as my \'REAL\' friend, even I don\'t know.
>>Now that I think about it, however, I choose some of them as my \'REAL\' friends, even without knowing it. 
Judging from my \'REAL\' friend, what I want my friends to be have is the passion about their job or career, and not having a guilty conscience. 
>>Based on my \'REAL\' friends, what I want my friends to have is a passion for their job or career, and not having a guilty conscience. 
I think ones who has high self-esteem have good thinking and cool as one personality.
>>I think one who has a high self-esteem, has good thinking and has a cool personality would be a good friend. 

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