friend 2
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At that time, my friend called and told me "Didn't you think that you would give me some gift money if I had the wedding ceremony? you know my situation, can you give me gift money first?"
While she was talking, she cried. But when I talked to her, my mood is not good. Of course I understood how she felt. But It was been a very long time phone call. I felt she knocked me whenever she only had a hard time. But I could not ignore her offer. So I helped her.
After helping her, she didn't call me and knock me at all. When she moved to new house, I knew the truth through the internet blog. She seemed to forget me after being ok.
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Compo 2: Thanks Ms. [Name], looks like I have to read all of it the next time I comment. Ooops! J
At that time, my friend called and told me "Didn't you think that you would give me some gift money if I had the wedding ceremony?
>>At that time my friend called me and said, Do you think you can give me some gift money?if I had the wedding ceremony?
you know my situation, can you give me gift money first?" >>You know my situation, but can you give me the money gift first?
While she was talking, she cried.
>>CORRECT
But when I talked to her, my mood is not good.
>>But when I talked to her, I didn't feel good.
Of course I understood how she felt.
>>CORRECT
But It was been a very long time phone call.
>>But it was a very long phone call.
I felt she knocked me whenever she only had a hard time.
>>I felt she would only knock on my door when she is having a hard time.
But I could not ignore her offer. So I helped her.
>>But I couldn't ignore her proposal so I helped her.After helping her, she didn't call me and knock me at all.
>>After helping her she didn't call me at all.
When she moved to new house, I knew the truth through the internet blog.
>>When she moved to a new house, I found out about the truth throug a blog.
She seemed to forget me after being ok.
>>It seems that she has already forgotten about me when she was okay.
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