Friend networks in business
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
You are right sir. When doing business, you need to use your personal connection. But some people could also use it against you.They could use their connection to cheat you. Be careful sir! See you on Wednesday.
Take care!
~T. Lynn
Friendship networks is very important in any world society.
>>Friendship network is very important in any society in the world.
Friendship network called usally as \'personal connection\'.
>>friendship network is usually called as \'personal connection\'.
Personal connection is very important to succeed in business in Korea.
>>correct!
Especially Korea is very strong regionalism, school relations and kinship.
>>Especially that Korea has a very strong regionalism, school relations and kinship.
These three elements are crucial for a salesman.
>>correct!
Sometimes many people were caused to harm by three elements.
>>Sometimes many people are harmed by these three elements.
A swindler also borrowes money with the intention of fraud.
>>A swindler could also borrow money with the intention of fraud.
The person who lend money could not refuse swindler\'s asking in acquaintance.
>>The person who lend the money could not refuse because he/she is an acquaintance.
Finally, the relationship broke up.
>>In the end, the relatioship is broken.
The realtionship can be positive, but sometimes we are influenced with negatively.
>>The relationship can be positive but sometimes it could also be negative.
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