Friendship is the most important relationship. Do you agree?

2019-09-16 · 첨삭 강사 Sheila

학생이 쓴 원문

I think friends are as important in life as my family. Sometimes, Most of teenager say, friend is very important than their parents. They want to be with friends even if they don\'t talk with their parents. Despite it is not right, friendship is very important in their life. I agree that friendship is the most important relationship. Even when I am old and my sons are independent themselves, I need a friend sincerely. They will talk and travel, shopping with me to soothe my loneliness. I have some real friend, so I am very happy^^.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! Happy Monday! Thank you for doing another homework. I was smiling when I was reading your homework. It seems you really put a great importance to friendship. I bet you are a good friend to your friends. :)

Until the next homework [이름]! :)

~Teacher Sheila

I think friends are as important in life as my family.

>>CORRECT

Sometimes, Most of teenager say, friend is very important than their parents.

>>Sometimes, most of teenager say, friend is very important than their parents.

They want to be with friends even if they don\'t talk with their parents.

>>CORRECT

Despite it is not right, friendship is very important in their life.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Even if it is not right, friendship is very important in their life.

I agree that friendship is the most important relationship.

>>CORRECT

Even when I am old and my sons are independent themselves, I need a
friend sincerely.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Even when I am old and sons are already independent, I need a sincere friend.

They will talk and travel, shopping with me to soothe my loneliness.

>>We will talk and travel with me, shopping with me to soothe my loneliness.

I have some real friend, so I am very happy^^.

>>I have some real friends, so I am very happy.

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