Friendship is the most important relationship. Do you agree? Why? Why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
Friendship is the most important thing in our life.
My favorite story in bible is relationship of Simon Peter and John who disciples of Jesus.
When the Jesus are die and Peter betray Jesus at three times.
Peter feel guilty so He go back to Galilee.
Peter is very sad and angry for himself.
That time, John stayed near Peter.
Just stay and wait.
Sometime, Trouble is coming in our life.
We need the friends like John.
And I have to do like that friend for my friends.
We can cry together and LOL(laugh out loud) together.
That\'s the reason why God gave us good relationship or family.
Sheila! Hear this gospel song named \'Who Am I\' sung by Casting Crowns.
강사 첨삭
Good job Simon! You did a good homework today! I\'m having a great time reading it. I also like the song \"Who Am I\" sung by Casting Crowns. It a good gospel song. See you tomorrow!
My favorite story in bible is relationship of Simon Peter and John who disciples of Jesus.
When the Jesus are die and Peter betray Jesus at three times. Peter feel guilty so He go back to Galilee.
We need the friends like John.
And I have to do like that friend for my friends.
That\'s the reason why God gave us good relationship or family.
~Teacher Sheila
Friendship is the most important thing in our life.
>>CORRECT
My favorite story in bible is relationship of Simon Peter and John who disciples of Jesus.
>>My favorite story in the bible is about the relationship of the disciples of Jesus who are Simon, Peter and John.
OR>My favorite story in the bible is about the three disciples of Jesus namely Simon, Peter and John.
When the Jesus are die and Peter betray Jesus at three times. Peter feel guilty so He go back to Galilee.
>>When Peter betrayed Jesus and Jesus died, Peter felt guilty so he went back to Galilee.
Peter is very sad and angry for himself.
>>Peter was very sad and angry with himself.
That time, John stayed near Peter.
>>CORRECT
Just stay and wait.
>>>He just stayed and waited.
Sometime, Trouble is coming in our life.
Sometime, Trouble is coming in our life.
>>Sometimes, trouble comes in our lives.
OR>>Sometimes, troubles come into our lives.
We need the friends like John.
>>We need a friend like John.
And I have to do like that friend for my friends.
>>And I have to be like that to my friends.
OR>>And I have to be a friend to my friends.
We can cry together and LOL(laugh out loud) together.
We can cry together and LOL(laugh out loud) together.
>>We can cry together and laugh out loud together.
That\'s the reason why God gave us good relationship or family.
>>That\'s the reason why God gave us good relationships and a family.
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