Frost days
학생이 쓴 원문
Topic : What can you say about the importance of frost days?
I wrote this essay yesterday, but maybe I didn’t save this.
I knew the meaning of frost days yesterday.
It means the number of days which is below celsius 0 degree.
It damage crops, so frost day is bad news to ours.
I think it is impossible to reduce the frost day sbecause it is natural phenomenon.
However, we can prevent damage from frost days.
For example, we can build windmill. Because it helps air circulation, it can prevent temperature drop.
Also, we can grow crops in greenhouse.
Like these method, we can solve the damage by frost days.
강사 첨삭
Hi Se [이름]!
Here are my corrections.
I knew the meaning of frost days yesterday. It means the number of days which is below celsius 0 degree.
>>I knew the meaning of frost days yesterday. It means the number of days which is below zero degree Celsius.
It damage crops, so frost day is bad news to ours. I think it is impossible to reduce the frost day sbecause it is natural phenomenon.
>>It damages crops so, frost day is a bad news to us. I think it is impossible to reduce the frost days because it is a natural phenomenon.
However, we can prevent damage from frost days. For example, we can build windmill. Because it helps air circulation, it can prevent temperature drop.
>>However, we can prevent the damages from frost days. For example, we can build a windmill. Because it helps in air circulation and it can prevent temperature drop.
Also, we can grow crops in greenhouse. Like these method, we can solve the damage by frost days.
>>Also, we can grow crops to solve greenhouse problems. With these methods, we can prevent the damages from frost days.
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