full- time child
학생이 쓴 원문
Fortunately my daughters don\'t want to live together with me after graduating university .
They realized already the importand and delightment from separation with parents .
So I think that it is important lots of experience in our life .
My daughters have been experienced the taste of liberation in independent living through studying abroad.
They should learn the wisdom of life through chllenges.
강사 첨삭
Ms. [이름]!
Yes, and it is really an amazing experience for a young adult if they live on their own. This culture was not common in the past, but young people nowadays choose to work in Big cities so they can be independent from their parents.
Aki~
Fortunately my daughters don\'t want to live together with me after graduating university .
>>> Fortunately, my daughters don\'t want to live together with me after graduating from university.
They realized already the importand and delightment from separation with parents .
>>> They already realized the importance and delight of separation from parents.
So I think that it is important lots of experience in our life .
>>> So I think that it is important to have lots of experience in our life .
My daughters have been experienced the taste of liberation in independent living through studying abroad.
>>> My daughters have experienced the taste of liberty by being independent, living through studying abroad.
They should learn the wisdom of life through chllenges.
>>> They should learn the wisdom of life through challenges.
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