future education
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I think Future education should emphasize creativity and teamwork.
In korea, private tutor and academy is common for students.
And they always try to go to the university in seoul.
They always fight their friends about their grade and feel stress.
I think that important thing is not good grade.
I think creativity and teamwork are moost important things to live our life.
So I think korean education must focus on these things.
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~~Teacher Kate
>>I think Future education should emphasize on creativity and teamwork.
In korea, private tutor and academy is common for students.
>>In Korea, private tutors and academies are common for students.
And they always try to go to the university in seoul.
And they always try to go to the university in seoul.
>>And they always aim for universities in Seoul.
They always fight their friends about their grade and feel stress.
They always fight their friends about their grade and feel stress.
>>They always compete with friends about their grades and feel stressed.
I think that important thing is not good grade.
>>I think good grades are not the only important thing.
I think creativity and teamwork are most important things to live our life.
I think creativity and teamwork are most important things to live our life.
>>I think creativity and teamwork are the most important things to live our life.
So I think Korean education must focus on these things.
So I think Korean education must focus on these things.
>>CORRECT!
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