Gain weight
학생이 쓴 원문
After got marry, women undergo many changes.
Change df hormone and environment made them gain weight.
It,s bad for my health
Also when I was dressed I was not pretty as much as a young girl.
I want to look beautiful even when I become a grandmother.
I think that inner beauty is more important.
강사 첨삭
Hi Mrs. [Name]. I appreciate your efforts in doing your homework. Keep it up. You are doing great. - T. Jasper
Here are your corrections:
>> After getting married, women undergo many changes.
>> We usually undergo hormone change and gaining weight.
>> It\'s bad for the health and when we are dressed, we are not as pretty as when we were still young.
>> I want to look beautiful even after beco[이름]g a grandmother but I still think that inner beauty is more important.
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