gambling
학생이 쓴 원문
The government can\'t control all kinds of gambling and pornograhic videos sites.
Even elementary students can access pornographic videos for free.
Online system can be beneficial but it can also be dangerous because nobody control these contents.
There are lots of illegal, violent and suggestive yellow journalism.
It makes people corrupt at fast speed.
강사 첨삭
Ms. [이름]!
Even the most strict government cannot do something about this. It will all depend on the person whether to give in to such kind of temptation.
Aki~
The government can\'t control all kinds of gambling and pornographic videos sites.
>>>The government can\'t control all kinds of gambling and pornographic video sites.
Even elementary students can access pornographic videos for free.
>>> CORRECT!
Online system can be beneficial but it can also be dangerous because nobody control these contents.
>>> Online systems can be beneficial but they can also be dangerous because nobody controls these contents.
There are lots of illegal, violent and suggestive yellow journalism.
>>> There is a lot of illegal, violent, and suggestive yellow journalism.
It makes people corrupt at fast speed.
>>> It makes people corrupt at a fast speed.
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