gender sensitivity
학생이 쓴 원문
It is a shocking news.
It is true that hidden camera crimes are rampant in Korea, even happen in school a while ago.
Women\'s sexual attraction in capitalist society is a making money.
Men can enjoy sexual entertainment paying money through several distal networks even more and more young men.
강사 첨삭
Good day Ms. [이름]! Thank you for this, and I agree with you that in order for people to earn money, they try to do what they can, even if it could harm or hurt someone. Take care!
Aki~
It is a shocking news.>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> It is an alarming news.
It is true that hidden camera crimes are rampant in Korea, even happen in school a while ago.
It is true that hidden camera crimes are rampant in Korea, even happen in school a while ago.
>>> It is true that hidden camera crimes are rampant in Korea, it even happened in school a while ago.
Women\'s sexual attraction in capitalist society is a making money.
Women\'s sexual attraction in capitalist society is a making money.
>>> Women\'s sexual attraction in a capitalist society is a making money
Men can enjoy sexual entertainment paying money through several distal networks even more and more young men.
Men can enjoy sexual entertainment paying money through several distal networks even more and more young men.
>>> Men can enjoy sexual entertainment by paying some money through several distal networks, much more for young men.
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