Give me one festival in your hometown that you enjoy the most.

2021-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I enjoy the Suseong pond festival in Daegu. Suseong pond festival has fun atrractions such as busking and magic in the afternoon, and has a [이름]derful fireworks festival in the evening. When you come to Daegu, I recommend the Suseong pond festival.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^

That sounds like a fun festival! Festivals are really great. People gather together to celebrate and have a good time. Hopefully, this virus would be gone so that we can go back to enjoying it again. 

I enjoy the Suseong pond festival in Daegu. 
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Suseong pond festival has fun atrractions such as busking and magic in the afternoon, and has a [이름]derful fireworks festival in the evening. 
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Suseong pond festival has fun attractions such as busking and magic shows in the afternoon. It also has  [이름]derful fireworks in the evening. 

When you come to Daegu, I recommend the Suseong pond festival.
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