Given a chance, how would you like to add or improve the medical system in South Korea?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it\'s still pretty good enough, but if I can, I want to improve some injections.
Because some times, It really hurts and some people can be traumatized.
I wish they would make needles real thin and make liquid medicine warmer and have a suitable temperature.
And make them more effective.
Also, I wish every pill would be smaller because many people are dying because of the pill. ( Choking )
But it\'s suitable for us now... :)
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Given a chance, how would you like to add or improve the medical system in South Korea?
I think it\'s still pretty good enough, but if I can, I want to improve some injections.
>>> I think it\'s pretty good enough, but if I can, I want to improve some injections.
Because some times, It really hurts and some people can be traumatized.
>>> Because sometimes it really hurts and some people are traumatized of injections.
I wish they would make needles real thin and make liquid medicine warmer and have a suitable temperature.
>>> I wish they will make the needles really thin and make the liquid medicine warmer or have a suitable temperature before it\'s injected.
And make them more effective.
>>> Moreover, I wish they can make these injections more effective.
Also, I wish every pill would be smaller because many people are dying because of the pill. ( Choking )
>>> Also, I wish pills will be smaller because many people are dying because of choking; the pills are too big.
But it\'s suitable for us now.
>>> But I think it\'s suitable for us now than in the past.
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