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학생이 쓴 원문
I would like to say before being parents and adult, please learn about kids and how to care them to realize what you have to do for them.
Everybody has to change our thought together.
And we can teach them a better way and become a better people.
강사 첨삭
I am touched with this message. Thank you for it.
I would like to say before being parents and adult, please learn about kids and how to care them to realize what you have to do for them.
>> I would like to say that before being parents or adults, please learn about kids. Learn how to care of them in order to realize what you have to do for them.
Everybody has to change our thought together.
>> Everybody has to change our thoughts altogether.
And we can teach them a better way and become a better people.
>> And, we can teach them in a better way so they would become a better person.
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