Giving an expensive gadget to a kid.
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My opinion is that giving an expensive gadget to a kid is not good idea. The kid doesn\'t know how much the gadget is. If I give the gadget to a kid, I always pay attention that how does he care of the gadget. If the kid loses or breaks the gadget, I can\'t forgive him.
In my case, When I give a gadget to my children, I give a used gadget or a cheap gadget. I went to glasses store to buy my sun\'s glasses with my sun. I told to my sun, \"You can select the cheapest glasses. I wouldn\'t blame you, although you lose or break the glasses.\"
But, He could select, He didn\'t want the cheapest glasses. After 20 minutes, he hadn\'t selected glasses, A Clerk who had been waiting my sun offered a discount. After getting the discount, my sun could select more expensive glasses than I allowed.
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My opinion is that giving an expensive gadget to a kid is not good idea.
>>> My opinion is that giving an expensive gadget to a kid is not a good idea.
The kid doesn\'t know how much the gadget is.
>>> CORRECT
If I give the gadget to a kid, I always pay attention that how does he care of the gadget.
>>> If I give an expensive gadget to a kid, then I will always pay attention to how he cares about the gadget.
If the kid loses or breaks the gadget, I can\'t forgive him.
>>> CORRECT
In my case, When I give a gadget to my children, I give a used gadget or a cheap gadget.
>>> In my case, when I give a gadget to my children, I give a used gadget or a cheap gadget.
I went to glasses store to buy my sun\'s glasses with my sun.
>>> One time I and my son went to a glasses store to buy my son\'s glasses.
I told to my sun, \"You can select the cheapest glasses. I wouldn\'t blame you, although you lose or break the glasses.\"
>>> I told my son, \"you can select the cheapest glasses. I wouldn\'t blame you, although you lose or break it.\"
But, He could select, He didn\'t want the cheapest glasses.
>>> But, he could not select, he didn\'t want the cheapest glasses.
After 20 minutes, he hadn\'t selected glasses, A Clerk who had been waiting my sun offered a discount.
>>> After 20 minutes, he hadn\'t selected a pair of glasses, then the clerk who had been waiting for my son offered a discount.
After getting the discount, my sun could select more expensive glasses than I allowed.
>>> After getting the discount, my son could select more expensive glasses than I allowed him to.
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