Glad to see you teacher!
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
I\'ll introduce my self in formally agian.
>> I\'ll formally introduce myself again.
or
>> Let me formally introduce myself again.
My English name is [이름] and my Korean name is Kanghyun [이름].
>> Correct
or
>> I\'m Kanghyun [이름] but my English name is [이름].
I\'m 25 years old in global age.
>> I\'m 25 years old in international age.
I\'m a senior student of university and my major is a fine arts.
>> I\'m a senior university student majoring in Fine arts.
However, I quited painting and drawing.
>> Correct
I was good at those.
>> Correct
When I said, \"I\'m going to quit painting\", then everybody dissuaded me.
>> Correct
or
>> When I said that I would quit painting, everyone dissuaded me.
But I didn\'t listen and moved on visual FX for movie.
>> Correct
I was just sick and tired of painting.
>> Correct
In that time, I though, I didn\'t have any options except quitting and I\'ve believed it was a great choice.
>> At that time, I thought I didn\'t have any options except quitting and I believe it was a great choice.
But it doesn\'t mean I discarded my major.
>> Correct
That is because, the bachelor of fine arts is going to really helpful of my employment activities.
>> It is because, Bachelor of Fine arts is going to be really helpful in my future employment activities.
For keeping my degree and moving on VFX at the same time, I have to join another academy after gratuating my university.
>> Keeping my degree and moving on VFX at the same time, I have to join another academy after graduating from university.
And after completing all of my courses, I will work abroad in Canada.
>> And after completing all my courses, I will work in Canada.
That\'s why I decided to learn English.
>> Correct
I can speak English a little but I have no foundations of English at all.
>> Correct
I\'ve never studied it before.
>> Correct
I only can use limited expressions.
And my vocabulary and grammer are so narrow.
>> I can only use limited expressions and my vocabulary and grammar are so narrow.
I can\'t stipulate rules of English at all.
>> Correct
I only can use English sensibly.
>> I can only use English sensibly.
And... I know, you demanded me writing my strengths for English but I failed to figure those out.
>> I know, you demanded me to write my strengths in English but I failed to figure those out.
I think I don\'t have any strengths for English.
>> Correct
By the way, I\'m really glad to meet you and I hope you have a great weekend sincerely.
>> By the way, I\'m really glad to meet you and I sincerely hope you have a great weekend.
Thank you for today.
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