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2018-10-19 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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I'll introduce my self in formally agian. My English name is [이름] and my Korean name is Kanghyun [이름]. I'm 25 years old in global age. I'm a senior student of university and my major is a fine arts. However, I quited painting and drawing. I was good at those. When I said, "I'm going to quit painting", then everybody dissuaded me. But I didn't listen and moved on visual FX for movie. I was just sick and tired of painting. In that time, I though, I didn't have any options except quitting and I've believed it was a great choice. But it doesn't mean I discarded my major. That is because, the bachelor of fine arts is going to really helpful of my employment activities. For keeping my degree and moving on VFX at the same time, I have to join another academy after gratuating my university. And after completing all of my courses, I will work abroad in Canada. That's why I decided to learn English. I can speak English a little but I have no foundations of English at all. I've never studied it before. I only can use limited expressions. And my vocabulary and grammer are so narrow. I can't stipulate rules of English at all. I only can use English sensibly. And... I know, you demanded me writing my strengths for English but I failed to figure those out. I think I don't have any strengths for English. By the way, I'm really glad to meet you and I hope you have a great weekend sincerely. Thank you for today.

강사 첨삭

I\'ll introduce my self in formally agian.

>> I\'ll formally introduce myself again. 

or

>> Let me formally introduce myself again.
 My English name is [이름] and my Korean name is Kanghyun [이름].

>> Correct

or

>> I\'m Kanghyun [이름] but my English name is [이름].
 I\'m 25 years old in global age.

>> I\'m 25 years old in international age.
 I\'m a senior student of university and my major is a fine arts.

>> I\'m a senior university student majoring in Fine arts.
 However, I quited painting and drawing.

>> Correct
 I was good at those.

>> Correct
 When I said, \"I\'m going to quit painting\", then everybody dissuaded me.

>> Correct

or

>> When I said that I would quit painting, everyone dissuaded me.
 But I didn\'t listen and moved on visual FX for movie.

>> Correct
 I was just sick and tired of painting.

>> Correct
 In that time, I though, I didn\'t have any options except quitting and I\'ve believed it was a great choice.

>> At that time, I thought I didn\'t have any options except quitting and I believe it was a great choice.
 But it doesn\'t mean I discarded my major.

>> Correct
 That is because, the bachelor of fine arts is going to really helpful of my employment activities.

>> It is because, Bachelor of Fine arts is going to be really helpful in my future employment activities.
 For keeping my degree and moving on VFX at the same time, I have to join another academy after gratuating my university.

>> Keeping my degree and moving on VFX at the same time, I have to join another academy after graduating from university.
 And after completing all of my courses, I will work abroad in Canada.

>> And after completing all my courses, I will work in Canada.
 That\'s why I decided to learn English.

>> Correct
 I can speak English a little but I have no foundations of English at all.

>> Correct
 I\'ve never studied it before.

>> Correct
 I only can use limited expressions.
 And my vocabulary and grammer are so narrow.

>> I can only use limited expressions and my vocabulary and grammar are so narrow.
 I can\'t stipulate rules of English at all.

>> Correct
 I only can use English sensibly.

>> I can only use English sensibly.
 And... I know, you demanded me writing my strengths for English but I failed to figure those out.

>> I know, you demanded me to write my strengths in English but I failed to figure those out.
 I think I don\'t have any strengths for English.

>> Correct
 By the way, I\'m really glad to meet you and I hope you have a great weekend sincerely.

>> By the way, I\'m really glad to meet you and I sincerely hope you have a great weekend.
 Thank you for today.


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