Globalization
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Sometimes, when we meet other culture, we can fall in culture shock. that time, we might be confused or feel disgusting. But I think it is very rude and arrogant for us to do like that
To prevent this case, we should keep and don't forget the word as "open mind".
Real globalization is not only to be one, but also to respect own(proper) culture.
But otherwise, globalization might be another name of relocalization.
Because the stage of globalization is only the earth in space.
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T.Camille
Sometimes, when we meet other culture, we can fall in culture shock.
>>correct!
that time, we might be confused or feel disgusting.
>>correct! (But you have to observe the proper capitalization)
But I think it is very rude and arrogant for us to do like that
>>correct!
>> But I think it is very rude and arrogant for us to do thatTo prevent this case, we should keep and don't forget the word as "open mind".
>>To prevent this case, we should keep and don't forget the word "open mind".Real globalization is not only to be one, but also to respect own(proper) culture.>>Real Globalization is not just being one or unified but also, respecting own culture.But otherwise, globalization might be another name of relocalization.
>>correct!Because the stage of globalization is only the earth in space.
>>correct!
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