globalization is a phenomenon in which people from many countries are integrated into one culture.

2023-10-18 · 첨삭 강사 Cathy

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I didn\'t quite understand the saying that globalization has improved people\'s lives. I think globalization is a phenomenon in which people from many countries are integrated into one culture. I don\'t feel bad about it. But I think it would be best to coexist with the culture of the country. Because if I don\'t know my old culture and insist on a new culture, I think all the characteristics of our country will disappear and change like the countries of that culture.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],
I appreciate your thoughtful reflection on globalization. Your viewpoint is insightful — acknowledging the integration of cultures without feeling negative about it is a balanced perspective. Your emphasis on coexisting with the culture of one\'s country and preserving its unique characteristics is wise. Balancing the embrace of new influences with the preservation of one\'s heritage is essential to maintaining cultural richness.
~Teacher Cathy

I didn\'t quite understand the saying that globalization has improved people\'s lives.

>>I don\'t quite understand the saying that globalization has improved people\'s lives.

I think globalization is a phenomenon in which people from many countries are integrated into one culture.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I believe that globalization is a process where individuals from various countries become integrated into a shared culture.

I don\'t feel bad about it.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I don\'t feel upset about it.

But I think it would be best to coexist with the culture of the country.

>>CORRECT

OR>>However, I believe it\'s ideal to peacefully coexist with the culture of the country.

Because if I don\'t know my old culture and insist on a new culture, I think all  the characteristics of our country will disappear and change like the countries of that culture.

>>Because if I abandon my old culture and solely adopt a new one, I believe the distinctive characteristics of our country might disappear, transforming it to be more like countries in that adopted culture.

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