Go on a visit!

2013-03-18 · 첨삭 강사 heidi

학생이 쓴 원문

Today, I went on a visit with my family. We went to the mountain~! First, we went a hot spring. I felt resfreshed! And we drived and see the flowers. The buds are just ready to burst! And we breathe in fresh air! After drived, We went to the restaurant~! We ate chives jeon, bulgogi, sanchae bibimbap, many side dishes~ Today, I was excited! I had a great time with family~^^

강사 첨삭

Hi there Sarah! ^^
Thank you for dropping by again!

I am happy to read that you had a great time with your family this weekend.
It\'s a good way to start the week. ^^

I wish you a marvelous Monday!

See you later!

~~ T. Heidi _^-^_
Today, I went on a visit with my family.
>>Today, I went out with my family.
We went to the mountain~!
>>We went to the mountain!
First, we went a hot spring.
>>First, we went to a hot spring.
I felt resfreshed!
>>I felt refreshed!
And we drived and see the flowers.
>>And we drove and saw some flowers.
The buds are just ready to burst!
>>The buds are just ready to bloom.
And we breathe in fresh air!
>>Correct!
After drived, We went to the restaurant~!
>>After the drive, we went to a restaurant.
We ate chives jeon, bulgogi, sanchae bibimbap, many side dishes~
>>We ate chives jeon, bulgogi, sanchae bibimbap,and  many side dishes.
Today, I was excited!
>>Today, I am excited!
I had a great time with family~^^

>>I had a great time with my family.

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