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2020-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 Fiona

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goal.. alright there are two things that i really wanna achive that\'s getting OPIC IH score and getting a job first of all, i\'ve been study English since last year, but i think i can\'t speak english very well i think getting OPIC IH score is one of the most important challenges this year becus i won\'t have a time to study english after getting a job so i think the only opportunity to study english hard is now and second i really wanna get a job. you know unemployeement is getting higher becuse of economic depression so i very anxious i really hope to get a job ASAP

강사 첨삭

Good morning [이름] Woo! 
Please be very careful with your spelling and put the correct punctuation for each of your sentence. 
Writing is also a good way to improve your English skills. Thanks you. 

goal.. alright
there are two things that i really wanna achive
>>There are two things I really want to achieve.
that\'s getting OPIC IH score and getting a job
>>It is to get an OPIC IH score and get a job.
first of all, i\'ve been study English since last year, but i think i can\'t speak english very well
>>I\'ve been studying English since last year, but I don\'t think I\'m good at English.
i think getting OPIC IH score is one of the most important challenges this year
>>I think getting OPIC IH score is one of the most important challenge of the year.
becus i won\'t have a time to study english. after getting a job so i think the only opportunity to study english hard is now and second i really wanna get a job. 
>>Since there will be no time to study English after getting a job, I think the only chance to study English now. 
you know unemployeement is getting higher becuse of economic depression so i very anxious
>>I\'m very nervous because I know that the unemployment rate is rising due to the economic depression. 
i really hope to get a job ASAP
>>I really hope to get a job ASAP. 

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