God's grace
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After having babies, I was not satisfied with belief. I could not focus on sermon in the church because I have to attend the worship with kids. So my belief was getting worse and weaker. I felt frustrated. And I tried to struggle for finding the best way to overcome my difficult situations but I couldn’t. So I started to drink some beer. All I can do is drink alcohol but I was not drunken. So I could understand why so many christians want to drink. After that I didn't judge people like that. How poor they are.... because they are not satisfied with Jesus and didn’t experience to meet a comforter in church so they might rely on drinking. Nowadays I don’t drink alcohol. When something bad happened, I just pray to God. Finally I can get many things through my pain now I can understand persons widely before I did. Sometimes the pain is god’s grace in my opinion.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Heidi!
Understanding one self is not an easy task to do what more if you try to understand other people. But you know, as we grow older our understanding grows because of our experiences. With the help of God, we\'ll grow wiser as we grow older.
Take care!
~T. Lynn
After having babies, I was not satisfied with belief.
>> After having babies, I was not satisfied with my belief.
I could not focus on sermon in the church because I have to attend the worship with kids.
>> I could not focus on listening to the sermon in the church because I have to attend the worship with my kids.
So my belief was getting worse and weaker. I felt frustrated.
>> correct!
And I tried to struggle for finding the best way to overcome my difficult situations but I couldn’t.
>> And I struggled to find the best way to overcome my difficult situation but I couldn’t.
So I started to drink some beer. All I can do is drink alcohol but I was not drunken.
>> So I started drinking some beer. All I can do is drink alcohol but I don\'t get drunk.
So I could understand why so many Christians want to drink.
>> correct!
After that I didn\'t judge people like that.
>> After that, I didn\'t judge people who were like that.
How poor they are.... because they are not satisfied with Jesus and didn’t experience to meet a comforter in church so they might rely on drinking.
>> How poor they are! They are not satisfied with Jesus and didn’t experience to meet a comforter in church so they just rely on drinking.
Nowadays, I don’t drink alcohol. When something bad happened, I just pray to God.
>> Nowadays, I don’t drink alcohol anymore. When something bad happens, I just pray to God.
Finally I can get many things through my pain now I can understand persons widely before I did.
>> Finally, I can understand many things through my pain. Now I can understand people more than before.
Sometimes the pain is God’s grace in my opinion.
>> correct!
Understanding one self is not an easy task to do what more if you try to understand other people. But you know, as we grow older our understanding grows because of our experiences. With the help of God, we\'ll grow wiser as we grow older.
Take care!
~T. Lynn
After having babies, I was not satisfied with belief.
>> After having babies, I was not satisfied with my belief.
I could not focus on sermon in the church because I have to attend the worship with kids.
>> I could not focus on listening to the sermon in the church because I have to attend the worship with my kids.
So my belief was getting worse and weaker. I felt frustrated.
>> correct!
And I tried to struggle for finding the best way to overcome my difficult situations but I couldn’t.
>> And I struggled to find the best way to overcome my difficult situation but I couldn’t.
So I started to drink some beer. All I can do is drink alcohol but I was not drunken.
>> So I started drinking some beer. All I can do is drink alcohol but I don\'t get drunk.
So I could understand why so many Christians want to drink.
>> correct!
After that I didn\'t judge people like that.
>> After that, I didn\'t judge people who were like that.
How poor they are.... because they are not satisfied with Jesus and didn’t experience to meet a comforter in church so they might rely on drinking.
>> How poor they are! They are not satisfied with Jesus and didn’t experience to meet a comforter in church so they just rely on drinking.
Nowadays, I don’t drink alcohol. When something bad happened, I just pray to God.
>> Nowadays, I don’t drink alcohol anymore. When something bad happens, I just pray to God.
Finally I can get many things through my pain now I can understand persons widely before I did.
>> Finally, I can understand many things through my pain. Now I can understand people more than before.
Sometimes the pain is God’s grace in my opinion.
>> correct!
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