Goldilocks the three bears.
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Once upon a time, there three bears lived in the forest,that were mom,dad,kid.
One day they walked the outside because ,inside house was hot.
While they went out it might the house cool down.After while Goldilocks came to the bear house.She saw the food, by the time she was a really hungry. She ate one of the small bowl then she moved the next room there were three chairs .She sat the smallest the chair it was a locking chair. She swung the back and forth suddenly, that was broken. She was worried about it.She was tired and fell asleep that time three bears came to the home,she wakes up then she saw three bears.She screamed that ran away.The little one went the table,his food was gone.
His mother made Warm food for him during he was eating dinner”I wish someone come to my home”. I thought little bear was lonely.
1. My dream is to travel all over the world.
2.How would you go here? By plane?
3. I had never dreamed into winning the lotto.
4.Her parents insisted for having us
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- Teacher Debbie
>> Once upon a time, there were three bears that lived in the forest. A couple and their kid.
One day they walked the outside because ,inside house was hot.
One day they walked the outside because ,inside house was hot.
>> One day, they went outside to walk because it was too hot inside their house.
While they went out it might the house cool down.
While they went out it might the house cool down.
>> While they were out, their house became cool.
After while Goldilocks came to the bear house.
>> After a while, Goldilocks came to their house.
She saw the food, by the time she was a really hungry.
>> She saw the food. She was really hungry at that time.
She ate one of the small bowl then she moved the next room there were three chairs .
>> She ate one of the small bowls with food then she moved to the next room where she saw three chairs.
She sat the smallest the chair it was a locking chair.
>> She sat on the smallest chairs, it was a rocking chair.
She swung the back and forth suddenly, that was broken.
>> She moved back and forth and suddenly it was broken.
She was worried about it.
>> correct
She was tired and fell asleep that time three bears came to the home,she wakes up then she saw three bears.
>> She was tired and fell asleep. At that time, the three bears came to their house. She woke up and saw the three bears.
She screamed that ran away.
>> She screamed and ran away.
The little one went the table,his food was gone.
>> The little bear went on the table and saw his food was gone.
His mother made Warm food for him during he was eating dinner”I wish someone come to my home”.
His mother made Warm food for him during he was eating dinner”I wish someone come to my home”.
>> His mother made him war, food and while eating dinner, he said- I wish someone will come to my house.
I thought little bear was lonely.
>> I think the little bear was lonely.
1. My dream is to travel all over the world.
>> correct
2.How would you go here? By plane?
2.How would you go here? By plane?
>> correct
3. I had never dreamed into winning the lotto.
3. I had never dreamed into winning the lotto.
>> I had never dreamed about winning the lotto.
4.Her parents insisted for having us.
4.Her parents insisted for having us.
>> Her parents insisted on having us.
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