good afternoon~

2016-08-19 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Good afternoon, teacher! Today, It's second day of school I had really fun time with my friends But actully I have little problem You know girls hang out when they make group However two of in our group fight so one is got out of the group So, i take care of her I am kind a leader in our group But i have sorry feeling to her She go everywhere alone or with just not close friend Maybe, she can be little hard now but i belive she will find a better friends We were so close friend But, when we walk together she Behaves carefully. I will help her to find better friend I will stop from here. ps. in Philippines is girl hang out and make group? in korea we hang out with group, so i am so curious about it also, do you think when i help the lonely friend other friends will be okay? I don't know but my friends likes me what should i do?:(

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! I felt sorry for your friend, too. Be a good friend to everybody especially to those who need a friend. It is better for you talk with her and tell her that you can be a friend to her. It saddens my heart when I see lonely people with no friends. So, spread the love and make peace. Anyway, I will talk with you again on Monday dear. ~Teacher Chloe Good afternoon, teacher! >>Correct! Today, It\'s second day of school >>It\'s the second day of school today. I had really fun time with my friends >>I really had a fun time with my friends. But actully I have little problem >>But, I have a little problem. You know girls hang out when they make group>>You know that girls hang out when they are in a group. However two of in our group fight so one is got out of the group >>However, two of my groupmates fought so one of them went out from the group. So, i take care of her >>So, I took care of her. I am kind a leader in our group>>I am the leader of our group. But i have sorry feeling to her >>But, I felt sorry for her. She go everywhere alone or with just not close friend >>She goes everywhere alone. Maybe, she can be little hard now but i belive she will find a better friends >>I think she is having a little hard time now but I believe that she will find better friends. We were so close friend >>We were close friends. But, when we walk together she Behaves carefully. >>When we talk together, she behaves carefully. I will help her to find better friend >>I will help her to find better friends. I will stop from here.>>Correct! ps. in Philippines is girl hang out and make group?>>Do girls make groups and hang out together in the Philippines? in korea we hang out with group, so i am so curious about it >>We do it in Korea so, I am curious about your culture. also, do you think when i help the lonely friend other friends will be okay? >>Do you think my other friends will be okay with me if I will help my lonely friend? I don\'t know but my friends likes me >>I don\'t know but my friends like me. what should i do?:( >>What should I do?

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