good afternoon~
학생이 쓴 원문
Good afternoon, teacher!
Today, It's second day of school
I had really fun time with my friends
But actully I have little problem
You know girls hang out when they make group
However two of in our group fight so one is got out of the group
So, i take care of her
I am kind a leader in our group
But i have sorry feeling to her
She go everywhere alone or with just not close friend
Maybe, she can be little hard now but i belive she will find a better friends
We were so close friend
But, when we walk together she Behaves carefully.
I will help her to find better friend
I will stop from here.
ps. in Philippines is girl hang out and make group?
in korea we hang out with group, so i am so curious about it
also, do you think when i help the lonely friend other friends will be okay?
I don't know but my friends likes me
what should i do?:(
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
I felt sorry for your friend, too.
Be a good friend to everybody especially to those who need a friend.
It is better for you talk with her and tell her that you can be a friend to her.
It saddens my heart when I see lonely people with no friends.
So, spread the love and make peace.
Anyway, I will talk with you again on Monday dear.
~Teacher Chloe
Good afternoon, teacher!
>>Correct! Today, It\'s second day of school
>>It\'s the second day of school today. I had really fun time with my friends
>>I really had a fun time with my friends. But actully I have little problem
>>But, I have a little problem. You know girls hang out when they make group>>You know that girls hang out when they are in a group.
However two of in our group fight so one is got out of the group
>>However, two of my groupmates fought so one of them went out from the group. So, i take care of her
>>So, I took care of her. I am kind a leader in our group>>I am the leader of our group.
But i have sorry feeling to her
>>But, I felt sorry for her. She go everywhere alone or with just not close friend
>>She goes everywhere alone. Maybe, she can be little hard now but i belive she will find a better friends
>>I think she is having a little hard time now but I believe that she will find better friends. We were so close friend
>>We were close friends. But, when we walk together she Behaves carefully.
>>When we talk together, she behaves carefully. I will help her to find better friend
>>I will help her to find better friends. I will stop from here.>>Correct! ps. in Philippines is girl hang out and make group?>>Do girls make groups and hang out together in the Philippines?
in korea we hang out with group, so i am so curious about it
>>We do it in Korea so, I am curious about your culture. also, do you think when i help the lonely friend other friends will be okay?
>>Do you think my other friends will be okay with me if I will help my lonely friend? I don\'t know but my friends likes me
>>I don\'t know but my friends like me. what should i do?:(
>>What should I do?
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