Good afternoon~!

2017-01-31 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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Good afternoon~!,teacher Did you have a great holiday? Actully i had a great holiday ~! I went to my grand parents house I met all of my family~! They gave me a lot of New Year's cash gifts I can buy a cosmetic, and clothes I am so happy~! Also i went to singing room with my family We had a really great time~! I sang so much.... So my voice sound really bad I watched tv too It was so much fun. We played bawling at my grandparents house Actully my cousin also like bawling so we played together I hope everyday is a new years day~! Then i can get a lot of money, also i can play with my family~! Anyway see you in the class~!:)

강사 첨삭

Hi there baby! Wow! Time flies! 4 days just slipped away...

Now back to normal...waaaaaaaaahhh!!
But it\'s always great talking to you...

You always impress me and two thumbs up for a job well done...

Well, you could say that again...

I hope everyday is New Year! Hahah..Foooodddd!!!

Anyway, take care always and have a great day...

xoxoTeacher Cam^^

Good afternoon~!,teacher

>>correct
 Did you have a great holiday?

>>correct
 Actully i had a great holiday ~!

>>correct (Observe the proper spelling of the word ACTUALLY)
 I went to my grand parents house

>>correct (grandparents\' house)
 I met all of my family~!

>>I met all of my family members.

OR: I met my relatives.
 They gave me a lot of New Year\'s cash gifts

>>correct
 I can buy a cosmetic, and clothes

>>correct

OR: I can buy some cosmetics and clothes.
 I am so happy~!

>>correct
 Also i went to singing room with my family

>>correct

OR: I also went to the singing room (karaoke bar) with my family.

 We had a really great time~!

>>We all had a great time!
 I sang so much....

>>correct

 So my voice sound really bad

>>correct

 I watched tv too

>>correct

 It was so much fun.

>>correct

 We played bawling at my grandparents house

>>correct (Observe the proper spelling of the word BOWLING)

 Actully my cousin also like bawling so we played together

>>Actually my cousin also likes bowling so we played together.

 I hope everyday is a new years day~!

>>I hope everyday is New Year\'s day.

 Then i can get a lot of money, also i can play with my family~!

>>correct
 Anyway see you in the class~!:)

>>correct

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