Good afternoon~ Ms.charry.

2018-01-31 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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Hi. this letter is second one. kkk Ms.charry~ I bough a notebook~~ Wow~~ I have a personal computer in the office. but as you may know, my company is financial company to handle customer's data. It has security programs. That's why I can use only to task by my pc. So I really need to buy a notbook. but It's secret to my husband. kkk Notebook is very expensive for me. When he knows about it. he complains it ^^;;; Please keep this secret. ^^

강사 첨삭

Hello there Ms. [이름]! 
Congratulations for having a new notebook computer! kkk.

Don\'t worry. Your secret is safe with me! ^_~

Just don\'t bring the notebook computer at home because your husband might see it. Haha!

Anyhow, enjoy your new computer.

You deserve it for working hard all the time. ^^

See you tomorrow. :)
~Teacher Charry

Hi.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Hi there!

this letter is second one. kkk
>>
This letter is the second one. kkk
Ms.charry~ I bough a notebook~~ Wow~~
>>
Ms. [Name], I bought a notebook computer.  Wow!
I have a personal computer in the office.
>> CORRECT!

OR >> In the office, I have a personal computer.
but as you may know, my company is financial company to handle customer\'s data.

>> But as you may know, my company is a financial company and we handle a customer\'s data.

It has security programs.
>> CORRECT!

OR >> The company has  security programs.

That\'s why I can use only to task by my pc.
>>
That\'s why I can only use my PC for my task.

So I really need to buy a notbook.
>>
So, I really need to buy a notebook (computer).
but It\'s secret to my husband. kkk
>> B
ut it\'s a secret from my husband. kkk
Notebook is very expensive for me.
>> The notebook (computer)
is very expensive for me. 
When he knows about it. he complains it ^^;;;
>> When he finds out about it, he will complain. ^^;;;
Please keep this secret. ^^

>> Please keep this a secret. ^^






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