Good evening!
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I most memorable travel was HAWAII before 3years. My family went 13days 12night. We got on helicopter for 1hours but my daughter slept because movesick. Cost was very expensive so was a shame.
The other photo is Mauna Loa Observatory.
This place was very beatiful and fantastic. I hope travel again to HAWAII.
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Hello, Ms. [이름]!
These photos are marvelous! Your family know so well to have so much fun! It\'s really a shame that your daughter fell asleep during the helicopter ride because the sight was to behold! This is truly living a good life. more families should be just like yours.
Thank you so much for sharing a piece of your wonderful travel. I am sure you have more memorable ones and will make more in the future.
So, when COVID-19 is over, I am sure that you will be out there enjoying more trips with your family. Thanks for this very good homework.
See you next week.
-T. Donna =)
>> My most memorable travel was in Hawaii 3 years ago.
The other photo is Mauna Loa Observatory.
This place was very beatiful and fantastic.
My family went 13days 12night.
>> My family went there for 13 days and 12 nights.
We got on helicopter for 1hours but my daughter slept because movesick.
>> We got on a helicopter for 1 hour but my daughter slept because of being helicopter sick.
Cost was very expensive so was a shame.
>> The cost was very expensive it was a shame.
The other photo is Mauna Loa Observatory.
>> Correct!
This place was very beatiful and fantastic.
>> Correct!
I hope travel again to HAWAII.
>> I hope to travel again in Hawaii.
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