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학생이 쓴 원문
on last saturday, as soon as finished work, i went home by a car. i drove a car during the last weekend. i enjoyed driving. but it was a hard rainy day. so i had to be careful during the driving.
on last sunday. there were two events. it was opposite events. one ting was my friend's wedding. and the other was funeral of my co-worker's father. i was happy to celebrate my friend and also i could meet my another friends at the wedding ceremony. but when i heard the funerl news. i was very surprised. because it was an unexpected news. his father was suffered from cancer of the lungs during the last year. i consolated him and his family.
through last sunday, i realized that health is the best happiness in our life. if we lost health, it's no use anymore which have lots of rich and lover.
강사 첨삭
on last saturday, as soon as finished work, i went home by a car.
>>last Saturday, as soon as I am finished with work, I went home driving a car.
i drove a car during the last weekend.
>>I drove a car last weekend.
i enjoyed driving.
>>correct!!
but it was a hard rainy day.
>>but it was raining heavily.
so i had to be careful during the driving.>>so I had to be careful while driving.
on last sunday. there were two events.
>>last Sunday, I need to attend two events.
it was opposite events.
>>it was two opposite events.
one ting was my friend's wedding.
>>correct!!
And the other was funeral of my co-worker's father.
>>correct!!
i was happy to celebrate my friend and also i could meet my another friends at the wedding ceremony.
>>I was happy to celebrate the occasion and I could meet my other friends at the wedding ceremony.
but when i heard the funerl news.
>>but when I heard about the news.
i was very surprised.
>>correct!!
because it was an unexpected news.
>>correct!!
His father was suffered from cancer of the lungs during the last year.
>>his father suffered from cancer of the lungs last year.
i consulated him and his family. >>I gave my condolences to him and his family.
through last sunday, i realized that health is the best happiness in our life.
>>though last Sunday, I realized that health is the best key for happiness.
if we lost health, it's no use anymore which have lots of rich and lover.
>>It doesn’t matter anymore if we have lots of riches and lover if we are not healthy.
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