good morning. lei.~

2010-07-06 · 첨삭 강사 lei

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Hi. this is [이름]. ^ ^ i'm just back my desk, after having a talk with Radich. he is a my foreign friend who is working at the same place. i told about him to you before. he back from his long vacation. he went to visit his hometown which is Croatia. and also he went to France. i asked him when he go to France, bring to me a post card which is sold at Vincent Willem van Gogh's house. Vicent is my favorite printer. and also i want to visit his hous. if him biring to me the photo, i will hang it my room and i will dream the trip. and i met him today at the stair. and we talked about the trip about 5 minutes. ^ ^ see you on the line.^ ^

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!
Good afternoon dear!! You seem to be really interested with this painter that you actually memorized his name (it's a long one) ^^. So I guess we'll talk about your favorite painter later during our class. See you!!
Lei :-)

Hi. this is [이름]. ^ ^

>>correct
i'm just back my desk, after having a talk with Radich.
>>correct

he is a my foreign friend who works at the same place.
>>correct

i told about him to you before.

>>I told you about him before

he back from his long vacation.

>>correct

he went to visit his hometown which is in Croatia.

>>correct

and he also went to France.

>>correct

i asked him when he go to France, bring to me a post card which is sold at Vincent Willem van Gogh's house.

>>I told him to buy me a post card which is sold at Vincent Willem van Gogh's house, the next time he visits France

Vincent is my favorite painter.

>>correct

and also i want to visit his hous.
>>and I also wanted to visit his house

if him biring to me the photo, i will hang it my room and i will dream the trip.
>>If he will buy me one, I will be posting it in my room and dream about having a trip on that place

and i met him today at the stairs.

>>correct

and we talked about the trip for about 5 minutes. ^ ^

>>correct
see you on the line.^ ^

>>I will talk to you on the line.

P.S.

here is the link where you can check different shots of Maitre Island hope you'll like it:

http://www.google.com/images?um=1&hl=en&tbs=isch:1&sa=1&q=maitre+island&aq=f&aqi=g1&aql=&oq=&gs_rfai=

http://www.google.com/imgres?imgurl=http://www.hotelsaccommodation.com.au/image.asp%3Fimage%3Dhttp://media%257Chotelscombined%257Ccom/HI776096%257Cjpg&imgrefurl=http://www.hotelsaccommodation.com.au/Coral_Palms_Island_Resort_Noumea.htm&usg=__6oE8hCOZj07wRkwH8yw7yytVXuw=&h=270&w=360&sz=34&hl=en&start=2&um=1&itbs=1&tbnid=lnilK0rpmvbiTM:&tbnh=91&tbnw=121&prev=/images%3Fq%3Dmaitre%2Bisland%26um%3D1%26hl%3Den%26sa%3DN%26ndsp%3D20%26tbs%3Disch:1

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