good morning. lei.~

2010-07-12 · 첨삭 강사 lei

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Dear lei. did you have a great weekend? it rained a lot during yesterday. so i spent most of my time at home. and last saturday was my friend's daughter's first birthday party. so i went there. she picked up the money as her's first choose. i guess it and i had a ticket which is lotto for present. the parents prepared some events for the party. as soon as i entered the party i took the ticket. my number was No.1. with the ticket i can select which one will be the baby's first choose. i think she will pick up the money. yes, she did. and then the M.C anounced the number of luck. the award was a rice(20Kg). i hoped i got the chance.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!!
Wow, you had another exciting weekend I guess. You are so lucky you won the draw. ^^ I am excited to hear about it more later during our class. See later.
Lei :-)

Dear lei. 
did you have a great weekend?
>>correct
it rained a lot during yesterday. 
>>it rained a lot yesterday
so i spent most of my time at home. 
>>correct
and last saturday, it was my friend's daughter's first birthday party. 
>>correct
so i went there. she picked up the money as her's first choice. 
>>correct
i guessed it and i bought a lottery ticket as my present. 
>>correct
the parents prepared some events for the party. 
>>correct
as soon as i entered the party i took the ticket. my number was No.1. 
>>correct
with the ticket i can select which one will be the baby's first choose. 
>>correct
i think she will pick up the money. yes, she did. 
>>correct
and then the M.C anounced the number of luck. 
>>correct
the award was a rice(20Kg). 
>>correct
i hoped i got the chance.
>>correct

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