Graduation picture day
학생이 쓴 원문
Today is a graduation picture day, so yestardy we maked a team. We will gonna take Our team was composed with 3boys and 2 girl, the 2boys was really close fiend with me however, the two girl was a bad girls. When we make a idea they just complained about our idea even tough they don\'t have a idea so we just started to ignore them and it was so fun.
강사 첨삭
Hello Jude, thank you for the composition! Wow! That\'s good to know that you will have your graduation picture taking today. Show your best smile! We will talk more in class about this. I will see you then. Take care and enjoy your day!~T. Lyn
Today is a graduation picture day, so yestardy we maked a team.
>>Today is our graduation photo day, so we formed a team yesterday.
We will gonna take Our team was composed with 3boys and 2 girl, the 2boys was really close fiend with me however, the two girl was a bad girls.
>>Our team is consisted of three boys and two girls. The boys are my close friends of [이름]e but the girls are not because they bad.
When we make a idea they just complained about our idea even tough they don\'t have a idea so we just started to ignore them and it was so fun.
>>Even when we came up with ideas, they just cursed us and said we had no ideas. So we just started ignoring them and it was so fun.
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