Graph of televsion and radio
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I think.. I need to practice to manage time for task 1....
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Hi Ye [이름]!
This is pretty decent work.
You have chosen the right expressions to get your message across.
I hope you keep giving your best in all of our classes.
Please keep in mind that this practice is for you to develop your abilities.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
The given line graph illustrates the percentage of UK population watching television and listening to the radio during the day.
>>The given line graph illustrates the percentage of the UK population watching television and listening to the radio during the day.
It clearly shows the features by the time of day or night over the period from
October to December in 1992.
>> It clearly shows the differences by the time of day or night over the period from October to December in 1992.
The most visible feature of this graph is the different popular times of radio and television.
>> The most visible part of this graph is the different popular schedules of radio and television.
The highest
percentage of radio was around 25% at 9am, while the percentage of television was approximately 42% at
8pm.
>> The highest percentage of radio was around 25% at 9 a.m., while the percentage of television was approximately 42% at 8 p.m.
The shape of both lines is similar like pyramid, but listening radio was popular in noon and watching
television was popular in midnight.
>> The shapes of both lines are similar to a pyramid, but listening to the radio was popular at noon and watching television was popular at midnight.
Both percentages were low after at 2am to 6 am.
>> Both percentages were low from 2 a.m. to 6 a.m.
After that, the both percentages increased together from
6am.
>> After that, both the percentages started increasing from 6 a.m.
The line of radio went up sharply, while the line of television fluctuated and went up slowly.
>> The line of the radio went up sharply, while the line of television fluctuated and went up slowly.
Reversely,
the line of radio went down slowly from around 9am, but the line of television went down dramatically
from 10pm.
>> Reversely, the line of the radio went down slowly from around 9 a.m., but the line of television went down dramatically from 10 p.m. .
1pm was the point where the trend which people preferred to listen or watch had changed from
radio to television.
>> 1 p.m. was the point where the trend which people preferred to listen or watch had changed from radio to television.
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