Great inventions.
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Great Monday to you Mr. [Name]!
Thanks for today\'s class.
And congratulations on your new achievement.
I say that it\'s one of your achievement\'s because you are one step closer to your dreams.
I am so happy for you.
Anyway, I hope that you\'ll have a great holiday!
Tell me more about your New Year on Thursday
May you have a prosperous New Year!
Have fun!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
Today\'s article talks about inventions that change the world.
>> Today\'s article talks about the inventions that changed the world.
The author defines the civilization as accumulation of novel notions.
>> The author defines the civilization as the accumulation of novel nations.
But some times we tend to overlook the simple invention of everyday.
>> correct!
Such as Electricity, Knitting, Car, Eyeglasses
>> correct!
For example, I cannot imagine lives without it.
>> For example, I cannot imagine life without it.
>> Because of modern inventions, our lives has been changed.
Before development of kitting, The treatment depended on the madicine only.
>> Before the development of knitting, the treatment depended on medicines only.
It can not cure all of diseases such as fracture, cancer
>> It cannot cure all kinds of diseases such as fracture and cancer.
Because of kitting, The way of treatment will be expanded more.
>> Because of knitting, the way of treatment was expanded more.
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