greatest strengths and weaknesses

My greatest strengths are my enthusiasm and desire to succed.I want to be a best teacher not a just normal teacher.This has helped me to study hard stopping from giving up.During my university life,I realized to success in each subject depends on how much I have enthusiasm and desire on it.These two factors changed my ettitude on the subject and affected my level of effort.The subject what I have high enthusiasm and desire made me to effort with whole my energy and eventually got a great result.I have a strong desire to succed and enthusiasm being a great teacher so I believe these are my strengths to be a best teacher.Speaking of my weakness is a soft sound of my voice.My voice is weak so it can be hurt easily but I'm trying to practice to protect and be strong so I will overcome it.

Hi [이름], great job in writng again today. Keep it up! Here are my suggestions for improvement: My greatest strengths are my enthusiasm and desire to succed. >>> Correct I want to be a best teacher not a just normal teacher. >>> Correct This has helped me to study hard stopping from giving up. >>> Correct, or >>> This has helped me to study hard and not give up. During my university life,I realized to success in each subject depends on how much I have enthusiasm and desire on it. >>> During my university life,I realized that success in each subject depends on how much enthusiasm and desire I have on it. These two factors changed my ettitude on the subject and affected my level of effort. >>> Correct, just the spelling of attitude The subject what I have high enthusiasm and desire made me to effort with whole my energy and eventually got a great result. >>> The subject where I have high enthusiasm and desire made me to exert my effort with all of my energy and eventually, I got a great result. I have a strong desire to succed and enthusiasm being a great teacher so I believe these are my strengths to be a best teacher. >>> I have a strong desire to succed; I also have high enthusiasm to be a great teacher so I believe these are my strengths to become a best teacher. Speaking of my weakness is a soft sound of my voice. >>> My weakness is my soft voice. My voice is weak so it can be hurt easily but I'm trying to practice to protect and be strong so I will overcome it. >>>My voice is weak so I can be easily hurt, but I'm trying to practice how to protect myself and how to be strong so I can overcome this weakness.