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2022-10-06 · 첨삭 강사 Kristine

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Are you a happy person? I think I\'m happy person because I have a good family and friends. And we don\'t have any serious probleme without my school. So I think I\'m an happy person. What usually makes you happy? There are a lot of activites that makes me happy, but nowadays, when I play Judo, it makes me feel very happpy. Because I play Judo with my friends. It\'s little bit tired but it\'s fun.

강사 첨삭

Thanks, Se [이름]!

 

That’s a good insight! You can always count on your parents and siblings for help and love. Family is very valuable and important and should never be taken for granted. A family is where we all start our life journey and helps us grow to be successful throughout our lives.

 

-Kristine ^^

 

Are you a happy person?

>> Correct.
I think I\'m happy person because I have a good family and friends.

>> I believe that having a supportive family and friends makes me a happy person.

And we don\'t have any serious probleme without my school.

>> We don’t have any serious problems except for my schoolwork.

So I think I\'m an happy person.

>> Correct.

Or >> Therefore, I believe I\'m a happy person.

What usually makes you happy?

>> Correct.
There are a lot of activites that makes me happy, but nowadays, when I play Judo, it makes me feel very happpy.

>> There are many things that makes me happy, but nowadays, Judo brings me the most.

Because I play Judo with my friends.

>> Because my friends and I do Judo together.

It\'s little bit tired but it\'s fun.

>> It’s a bit tiring but it\'s still fun. 

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