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2022-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Kristine

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What does happiness mean to you? There are somthing that makes me happy. First, when I play my hobbies like soccer or judo, it makes me happy, also if I feel peace and confortable, it makes me happy too. How do you cheer up people in your family when they are feeling down? Actually, I don\'t cheer up my family when they are feling down, Because I\'m not a good at cherring up someone and all my family members want to be alone when they are das or angry.

강사 첨삭

Hey, Se [이름]!

 

Happiness is probably the most pursued factor in life, above wealth, health, and good relationships. It is the thing that most people want, yet it is one of the most difficult aspects of life to quantify.

 

-Kristine ^^

 

What does happiness mean to you?

>> Correct.
There are somthing that makes me happy.

>> There are a few things that makes me happy.

First, when I play my hobbies like soccer or judo, it makes me happy,

>> First of all, I feel happy when I play soccer and Judo.

also if I feel peace and confortable, it makes me happy too.
>> I’m also delighted when I am at peace and comfortable.
How do you cheer up people in your family when they are feeling down?

>> Correct.
Actually, I don\'t cheer up my family when they are feling down,

>> I actually don’t know how to cheer up my family when they are feeling down.

Because I\'m not a good at cherring up someone and all my family members want to be alone when they are das or angry.

>> Because I\'m terrible at cheering people up and every person in my family prefers to be by themselves when they\'re upset. 

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