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학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t wish that Korea will have an ageing population because having the ageing population has many kinds of inconveniences.
First, younger poeple should take care of more elder people. By elder people increasing, a younger person should take care of elders more than now.
Second, Korea\'s financial condition will get worse. Because the people who can make moneys will decrease but other people who can not make moneys will increase.
강사 첨삭
Absolutely, there will be inconveniences in having a fast ageing population as you have mentioned.
You have also to take part in doing away or conforming to it.
See you in class later!
-T. Donna
>> Correct!
Or: I don\'t wish that Korea will have an ageing population because having an ageing population has many kinds of inconveniences.
First, younger poeple should take care of more elder people. By elder people increasing, a younger person should take care of elders more than now.
>> First, the younger people should take care of the older people. By elderly people increasing, younger persons should take care of the elders more than now.
Second, Korea\'s financial condition will get worse. Because the people who can make moneys will decrease but other people who can not make moneys will increase.
>> Correct!
Or: Second, Korea\'s financial condition will get worse because the people who can make money will decrease but other the older people who can not make money will increase.
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