H.W.
학생이 쓴 원문
I think music is an important part of human life.
Recently, I totally feel that music is important to me.
Music can heal one\'s pains and can make one more emotional and sometimes music can join many people.
Like these, music is a part of our life.
Thus music is important to human beings.
강사 첨삭
[이름], hello!
Thank you for answering my question on our homework once again.
Music is one of the best entertainment we can ever have in this lifetime. It will always be a part of our lives.
See you in our class later.
-T. Donna =)
>> Correct!
Recently, I totally feel that music is important to me.
Music can heal one\'s pains and can make one more emotional and sometimes music can join many people.
Like these, music is a part of our life.
Thus music is important to human beings.
Recently, I totally feel that music is important to me.
>> Correct!
Music can heal one\'s pains and can make one more emotional and sometimes music can join many people.
>> Music can heal one\'s pains and can make one more emotional and sometimes can connect many people.
Like these, music is a part of our life.
>> In these ways, music is a part of our lives.
Thus music is important to human beings.
>> Correct!
Or: Thus, music is important to human beings.
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