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2013-07-01 · 첨삭 강사 Kristel

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I think both their children and government should look after the old people. First, children have an obility to look after them like their parents support them. In fact, we call that filial duty in Korea. From old times, that is most important standard in Asia. So, we should remember it and have an effort to practice it. Second, because there are many old people in the modern society, their children would feel limitation to look after their parents by themselves. So, the goverment should help them with financail supports. And they can also help with sending volunteers who can help them. If the government do like this, it would be a big help for the young people.

강사 첨삭

Hello! Good morning!

I would definitely agree with your opinion. I admire that you really is a family oriented and I\'m proud that we Asians are like that.

Our parents brought us up and gave us the best life they could give so it would just be fare for them to be taken cared of when they get older. Good job!

Keep it up. ^^

-T. Kathrine-

I think both their children and government should look after the old people.
>> Correct! ^^

First, children have an obility to look after them like their parents support them.

>> Correct! ^^ (ability)

In fact, we call that filial duty in Korea.

>> Correct! ^^

From old times, that is most important standard in Asia.

>> Correct! ^^

>> Or From old times, that is the most important standard in Asia.

So, we should remember it and have an effort to practice it.

>> Correct! ^^
Second, because there are many old people in the modern society,

>> Correct! ^^

their children would feel limitation to look after their parents by themselves.

>> their children would feel limitated to look after their parents by themselves.

So, the goverment should help them with financail supports.

>>  Correct! ^^ [government// financial]

And they can also help with sending volunteers who can help them.

>>  Correct! ^^

If the government do like this, it would be a big help for the young people.

>>  Correct! ^^

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