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2013-07-03 · 첨삭 강사 Barbara

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I disagree that it is always essential to the truth. I think we need to lie a little bit in some circumstances. First, if we tell the truth and it can make people hurt, we can lie for other people. For example, when I was child, I fell on the ground and hurt a lot. But I lied to my mother not to worry her. Then, I treat myself. Finally, it was revealed, but I think it was a good way to handle. Second, if we need to make a good relation, we can lie. For example, when I was high school student, I lied, "I like playing the baseball" to make a friends. Actually, I didn't like playing the baseball and even I didn't know how to play. But because other friends liked it except for me, I pretended to like it and played with them. Except for these circumstances, we should always be careful not to lie.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!

Thanks for writing your composition. 

I do agree that it will depend on what situation you are going to lie.

But always bear in mind that telling a lie if not hurt other people but it will mostly hurt you.

I\'ll see you later!

Have a great day ahead! ^^

T. Maria^^ 

I disagree that it is always essential to the truth.

>> I disagree that it is always essential to tell the truth.

I think we need to lie a little bit in some circumstances.

>> CORRECT
First, if we tell the truth and it can make people hurt, we can lie for other people.

>> First, if we tell the truth and it will  hurt other people, then we can lie to them. 

 For example, when I was child, I fell on the ground and hurt a lot.

>> CORRECT

But I lied to my mother not to worry her.

>> CORRECT

>> OR: I lied to my mother for her not to worry.

Then, I treat myself.

>> Then I treated myself.

Finally, it was revealed, but I think it was a good way to handle.

>> CORRECT

>> OR: Finally, my mom knew about it but I think that it was a good way to handle it.
Second, if we need to make a good relation, we can lie.

>> CORRECT

For example, when I was high school student, I lied, \"I like playing the baseball\" to make a friends.

>> CORRECT

>> OR: For example, when I was in high school, I lied that I like playing baseball just to make friends.

Actually, I didn\'t like playing the baseball and even I didn\'t know how to play.

>> Actually, I don\'t like playing baseball and I don\'t even know how to play it.

But because other friends liked it except for me, I pretended to like it and played with them.

>> Because my friends like it except for me so I pretended to like it and played with them.
Except for these circumstances, we should always be careful not to lie.

>> CORRECT

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