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Hello!
Thank you for sending this in!^^
Keep on writing, okay?
Also, keep on sending them to me, so we can work on the parts that need to be polished.
Maybe we can still talk about this in class, if you don\'t mind.^^
Always take care!^^
Yes, I agree that we expect too much from our public figures.
>>Correct!
In addition, we sometimes require them not to have any ethical defect.
>>Correct!
So, some public figures are deeply pressed.
>>Correct!
If one of public figure make a mistake, we are indeed diappointed because we believe their appearances from the TV show.
>>If one of our public figures makes a mistake, we are indeed, disappointed because we believe in how they appear from some TV shows - perfect with no defects.
So, some of disappointed fans changed themselves to antifan.
>>So, some disappointed fans become anti-fans.
Of course, I also sympathize with them, but I can not agree with changing their attitude.
>>Of course, I also sympathize with them but I cannot agree with how they change their attitude.
The public figures are also human, so they can make a fault.
>>Public figures are also human, so they can also make a fault.
Therefore, I think they had better understand and accept this fact.
>>Therefore, I think they better understand and accept this fact.
And they should act more mature.
>>Correct
OR >> And they should act more matured.
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