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2013-07-10 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

학생이 쓴 원문

I agree that we have to act more carefully and slowly in urgent situation.I have two reasons for that. First, there is a proverb in Korea and it is you should turn around when you are in urgent situation. That's because we could be in worst situation. Therfore, it is important to think again wheter doing that is right or not before you do somehing. Second, if we think one more time, we could get better next time. Because we can think what is better option, we can decide best way to resolve a problem. Therefore, I think we should have a time to consider ways to solve the problems only if it isn't crisis that requires solutions quickly. The best way is judging whether we have to solve fast. Then, we should decide priorities and solve the each problem carefully with the best way.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!!

A pleasant afternoon!

This was great! You really have good points here. ^^ 

Keep on writing! Please don\'t forget to check the corrections I made for you here.

Have a nice day and see you!

T.Maria^^

I agree that we have to act more carefully and slowly in urgent situation.

>> I agree that we have to act more carefully and slowly in urgent situations.

I have two reasons for that.

>> CORRECT!!
First, there is a proverb in Korea and it is you should turn around when you are in urgent situation.

>> First, there is a proverb in Korea which says,  you should turn around when you are in an urgent situation.

That\'s because we could be in worst situation.

>> CORRECT!! [...in a worst situation.]

Therefore, it is important to think again wheter doing that is right or not before you do somehing.

>> Therefore, it is important to think again whether we\'re about to do something right or not before executing it.
Second, if we think one more time, we could get better next time.

>> CORRECT!!

Because we can think what is better option, we can decide best way to resolve a problem.

>> Because we can think what the better option is and we can decide for best way to resolve a problem.
Therefore, I think we should have a time to consider ways to solve the problems only if it isn\'t crisis that requires solutions quickly.

>> Therefore, I think we should have time to consider ways to solve a problem only if it isn\'t a crisis that requires solutions quickly.

 The best way is judging whether we have to solve fast.

>> CORRECT!!

Then, we should decide priorities and solve the each problem carefully with the best way.

>> Then, we should decide our priorities and solve each problem carefully with the best way.

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