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Hello, teacher Chloe! This topic is about the responsibility of the young to provide financial security to the elderly. My opinion is that the young have the responsibility to provide financial security to the elderly. Nobady can live alone oneself so people make the community like nation. In the community, each person has the responsibility to help other members. But todays people often forget it and think it doesn't need because they take community life for granted and forget the truth that they also need other's helps. If we give up the responsibility because we can't feel its necessity right now, the community will collapse slowly. And I think the responsibility to help other members includes that the young provide financial security to the elderly. It's because the young already have received helps from the elderly not because they will be the elderly. So I believe that it is the responsibility of the young to provide financial security to the elderly.

Good evening to you!First of all, allow me to commend you for doing such a good job on your composition. I noticed that you are not shying away from making complex sentences. Your sentences are longer, which is a plus, because it helps you practice the use of conjunctions and commas in constructing your sentences. Continue this trend! It\'s a good practice. The only thing I noticed you can practice more on is explaining your thoughts clearly, in a way that\'s easy to understand. Other than that, you\'ve done well.-Teacher Chloe This topic is about the responsibility of the young to provide financial security to the elderly.>>Correct!My opinion is that the young have the responsibility to provide financial security to the elderly.>>Correct!Nobady can live alone oneself so people make the community like nation.>>Nobody can live alone by themselves, instead, the community of people make up the nation.In the community, each person has the responsibility to help other members.>>Correct!But todays people often forget it and think it doesn\'t need because they take community life for granted and forget the truth that they also need other\'s helps.>>But today, people often forget it, thinking it\'s not needed because they take community like for granted and they forget the truth that they need other\'s help.If we give up the responsibility because we can\'t feel its necessity right now, the community will collapse slowly.>>Correct!And I think the responsibility to help other members includes that the young provide financial security to the elderly.>>And I think the responsibility to help other members includes providing financial security to the elderly.OR:>>And I think the responsibility to help other members includes the young providing financial security to the elderly.It\'s because the young already have received helps from the elderly not because they will be the elderly.>>It\'s because the young already received help from the elderly, not because they will be the elderly in the future.So I believe that it is the responsibility of the young to provide financial security to the elderly.>>Correct!